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you and me
you and me,
we can talk about anything;
and i'll just lay down in the grass,
and look at the clouds with you.
come on over,
i won't bite;
let me thread my fingers with yours,
so i can finally be at peace.
you and me,
we like bees and honey;
we fit so well together,
then why am i so afraid of rejection?
you and me,
just like pees in a pod;
i can't imagine life without you,
i can barely breathe in your presence.
you and me,
we like bees and honey;
we fit so well together,
then why am i so afraid of rejection?
babe,
just let me close my eyes;
let me savor every single moment.
'cause you and me,
we like bees and honey;
fittin so perfectly together,
it's like the mona lisa.
we like bees and honey;
we fit just so perfectly together,
why am i afraid of rejection?
rejection....
why am i so afraid of rejection?
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i will definitely be favoriting this piece right away .
and i also need to mention that i think this style of writing really fits you well . <3
good job .
-keri .
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